Very good!
Looks like you know how to handle the instruments well and when to punch them in. I do like some industrial songs, but this was really nice made, its noticable that youve put alot of effort in it. The melody was hardcore. But i dunno what happened at the end tho... maybe you should work more on how to make a suitable, maybe surprising, yet original ending. Think of making a star finish or something, something that will make the viewer being interested in the effort youve given. The ending is also the most important part as the start is!
This was good indeed! Ill give this a 5 ^_^
-Hammi
Plz vote on my songs if you like some of them :D